“The future for me is already a thing of the past –
You were my first love and you will be my last” – Bob Dylan
So long ago, first man, first woman, first love a song sung so patiently. Stars and angels, ruins beneath the eggs of Bisti, let what we do be born patiently. My love, my love I will love you eternally. My love, my love, I will see you again in Bisti eventually,
She, moves and summons so patiently, in threes, sixes and nines, the Bisti moving she on bended knee. Moving these images throughout these dreams. Swaying in song so delicately, her whispers dialectically. While Steve Perry wails, she kisses me, under rocks above me, oh another world that beckons me. Ruins that spin, while she touches me, here to live eternally. Sand pouring methodically, the notes of stars above fall melodically. The universe outside my car, our score that no one see’s. Just the spirits of Bisti so patiently, in you and me, moving, eyes closed, incessantly. We burst, worlds move, so patiently, light shines incandescently. Inside and outside of me, only this once. I succumb patiently.
Night winds fly higher than we can see, desert moon in November touches the ground in prophesy. Your hips bare the secrets inside of me, together, first woman, and first man, mythically almost tragically. Still there is a song forever, I keep gloriously. Later I learned you died, on a highway knowing what you did not see. No doubt your eyes closed, just like in Bisti, so patiently. November 29th so early. The morning star falling on a frozen desert sea. To your grave, in my head you kept me, so no one could see, the trail we blazed patiently. The spirits of Bisti, a covenant in immortality, tall columns of rock of relevancy, that watched so quietly, while we shared so patiently. So patiently.
Spirit I summon thee, so patiently, just like then move with me, let doors open like her with me. First man, first woman, let guardians shelter us in this moving desert sea, while we move too. Her to me. Me to what I cannot see, above these ruins, where shadows recede. Let what we did bring immortality. Let our love be patiently.
So long ago, first man, first woman, first love a song sung so patiently. Stars and angels, ruins beneath the eggs of Bisti, let what we do be born patiently. My love, my love I will love you eternally. My love, my love, I will see you again in Bisti eventually. – דָּנִיֵּאל – 11.29.20
Chills while reading this dear brother. Chills
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Thank brother, I appreciate that. Shalom Daniel
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Shalom brother. 😊
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Ahhh the first love. 🙂 This was awesome Daniel!
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Thank you Scott. Always appreciated. How was your Thanksgiving?
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Your welcome Daniel. Thanksgiving was great, lots of grandkids, great food and fun. How was your own?
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Ours was good. quiet, but just the way i like it. 😉
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Sometimes I could use a little quiet. 😉
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This was lovely. Eternal romance…
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Hi Dawn, Your kind words are very much appreciated. I like the idea of eternal romance.
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I like it too. It is a spiritual connection with someone’s spirit.
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“So long ago, first man, first woman, first love a song sung so patiently. Stars and angels, ruins beneath the eggs of Bisti, let what we do be born patiently. ” This is good opener my young friend. As you usually do, there are metaphors to ponder and great truths on love to absorb throughout this post. Thank you. Bill
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Thank you Bill. I think of life sometimes as one big metaphor what do you think?.
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I agree Daniel. We should have an offline conversation about this at some point. You might be able to help me with something. 🙂 Bill
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Would be happy to Bill. 🙂
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I will be shooting you my email address soon, I look forward to the conversation. Bill
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Beautiful!
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Thank you Erin, happy you liked this. 🙂
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🙂 YW!
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“The Spirit’s of Bisti’ was amazing. So many memorable lines. The idea of “first man, first woman, first love a song sung so patiently. ” takes me to a pleasant memory of my own. Thank you.
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Hi Elizabeth, Very kind of you to say. Thank you. it is cool this piece brought you memory’s of your own.
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Your welcome. 🙂
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❤ this!
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Thank you Amy for your kind comment. So happy you liked this.
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You are welcome, I enjoyed reading this piece. 🙂
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Touching beautiful and magical just like the moon dust it is written in. 😉 ❤
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Hi Raquel, Thank you for your comment. I am a fan of moon dust. 😉
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I always think of the Cherry Glazerr song. 😉
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You only feel like this once in your life, it is not for most of us permanent, and we go on to meet what is permanent. Still as you so aptly put it is a time never forgotten. Well done.
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Thank you Nina for your comment. I could not agree more. 🙂
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👍 🙂
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A beautiful love story Daniel, that brings with it so much more I think. The spiritual relationship with a natural place in your life. I took the time to look up the “eggs of Bisti”, all interesting. I can see why you write so often of this place.
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Hi Lynette, Thank you for your comment. i am so happy you took the time to look up the eggs of Bisti. really cool area. Hope all is going well with you and yours.
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The landscape was amazing. It is an area that is now on my bucket list to visit someday thanks to your writings.
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Beautiful, full of romance and spirits, the best kind of reading. 🙂
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Thank you Lauren for your wonderful comment. I am so happy you liked this piece.
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It was beautiful. You are welcome. 🙂
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Dearest Daniel,
This was sweet, and yet full of a bigger picture love. I wondered if the real intention was to explore one’s relationship with life as a whole. Overall it was one of your best.
❤
Ruby
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Thank you Ruby, I think you hit on my personal intention with this piece, I suppose some might see it a bit differently which is fine. 🙂
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Dear Daniel,
Our life of love begins with our first love. This wonderful poem spoke to me of that. Thank you for confirming this.
❤
Ruby
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I liked this one Daniel, of course I like them all. 🙂
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Hi Ryan, Thank you my friend, I am grateful for your reading and many supporting comments. 🙂
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Anytime my friend! 🙂
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Loved this! 🙂
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Thank you Suzy. very happy you liked this piece. 🙂
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Your welcome. 🙂
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“Night winds fly higher than we can see, desert moon in November touches the ground in prophesy. ” this line got to me Daniel. Well written, it touches some emotional places for me.
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Hi Darrin, Thank you for your kind comment. I am grateful when someone finds a line that touches them. Humbled by that really. Thanks again. 🙂
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The pleasure is mine Daniel. Wishing you and your family health. 🙂
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Another fav for me Daniel. Steve Perry’s voice is wonderful in Patiently. It all fit together beautifully.
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Thank you Jane, very grateful you liked this. “patiently” is one of my favorite Journey songs. I find Steve Perry’s voice extraordinary in it.
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I am a great fan myself of his voice. 🙂
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You never fail to capture my attention Daniel. Sometimes the parallels to your writing and my life are amazing. My own “Bisti” was the mighty “Redwoods”. 😉
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Thank you Wang for your comment. You humble me again, with your comparison. The redwoods would be an incredible “Bisti” I am thinking. 😉
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I still go to the redwoods now and then, much has changed around them but not with them if you know what I mean. 😉
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Yes I do, to quote John Denver, “They try to tear the mountains down, to bring in a couple more”. 😦
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We think alike. “More people, more scars on the land”.
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I enjoyed “the Spirits of Bisti” Daniel. Your words matched the song “Patiently” perfectly. BTW one of my favorites. 🙂
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Hi Carmel, Thank you for your comment. I am with you on the song “Patiently” being a favorite. It is for me too. As always I appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment.
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Love and Patience are two gifts that work hand in hand. 😉
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❤ ❤ ❤ I think that says it best. 😉
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Thank you Heather, I am always grateful for your kind comments and support of my writing. Shalom, Daniel
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Your writing is inspirational to me and I can relate with many of the words you write, so you are welcome. 😉 Shalom
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I am curious about the numbers? “She, moves and summons so patiently, in threes, sixes and nines” 🙂
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Thank you Deb for your comment. I suppose the numbers can mean different things to different people. For me they are the rhythm’s and timing, cadence if you will to the summoning of the spirit of G_D.
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Your welcome Daniel. Thank you for your thoughts on the numbers you put into your poem. All I can say is “WOW”
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This had a nice feel to it. Very visual.
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Thank you Linette for your kind comment. i am happy you liked this. I tend to write very visually. 🙂
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I can tell (on the visual part) I am much the same way in my communications. 🙂
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First love is always kept within each of us. Often not the best love, but still the first. 😉 This was great! 🙂
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Hi Steve, I agree with what you said. Thank you for saying it in a better way then I can. 🙂 I am happy you liked this. Hope all is going well with you and yours. 🙂
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Going well here, thanks. I seldom say anything better, but happy I was of service. 🙂 best to you and your family Daniel.
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❤ 🙂
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Thank you Lisa, so happy you liked this. Shalom my friend. 🙂
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Shalom Daniel! ❤ 🙂
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Great story mate. 🙂
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Hi Shaun, Once again grateful for your comment and support of my writing. Happy you liked this piece. 🙂
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Anytime mate!
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This is a beautiful, sweet story Daniel.
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Thank you Abigail for your kind comment. i am happy you liked this story. 🙂
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🙂
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I have been to Bisti before. Loved your story, and hope November 29 brings healing.
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Hi Beth, it is really cool that you have been to Bisti. I am happy you liked this. 🙂
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You captured the spirit that is there very well with this post. Even though I assume you are speaking of a romance, I gather your words could also be taken as a fondness for the beauty of the location.
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You nailed it. 😊
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🙂
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Excellent writing sir. You continue to astound me. keep them coming. 🙂
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Thanks Brian, I appreciate your comment. I am also appreciative that you want me to continue. 😉
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Please do sir, it is good for my mind. 😉
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This is amazing Daniel. Loved every word.
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Thank you Tella, very happy you liked this piece. 🙂
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🙂 Your Welcome 🙂
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It is a wonderful work Daniel, the first love theme built into the first man, and woman mythologies. You are very talented.
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Hi GA, Thank you for your kind comment and compliment. I like that you got into the mythology aspect.
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You weave a wonderful world in writing Daniel. I enjoy your work each time I read it.
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Excellent, Daniel!
More rhyming than many of your prose pieces, and more passionate in a way.
What way? Well, in the way of love – patiently, eternally.
I’m listening to “Patiently” right now. However, while reading , “Hell’s Bells” by ACDC was playing near me.
Both/either seem to make sense, in regards to the eggs of Bisti.
Well penned, my friend!
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Thank you my friend. Ha ha, “Hell’s Bell’s and “Patiently” what a great combination under the “Eggs of Bisti”. I am amazed by the high note Steve Perry carries at the end of the song. 🙂
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Yes, he is very talented. I’ve always wondered why he did not perform with Journey when they were inducted into the R&R Hall of Fame?
He was with the band to receive the award, but a voice clone did the singing.
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I had wondered the same, even wondered if he had, had some voice issues (physically speaking). he released a solo project about two years ago, that is very good in my opinion. Voice still sounded great on it. 😉
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Well, that doesn’t answer that! Lol!
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No, no it doesn’t 🙂
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Incredible writing!
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Thank you George. Happy you liked this. 🙂
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Anytime! 🙂
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Beautiful! 🙂
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Hi Abby, thank you I am happy that you liked this.
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